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05 April 2015 @ 04:31 pm
[writing] NaPoWriMo Day 5: Lover’s Chain, Paradine  
Still following Seanan McGuire's Lover's Chain tutorial. The fifth step is the paradine, a five line Italian poem with three unique lines, with a 1, 2, 3, 2, 1 pattern, with an ABABA rhyme scheme. I am writing a love poem to a monstrous final girl.

I've never written a paradine before. I like repeating lines, so this should be fun, if hard. (Making repeating lines work without it feeling forced is difficult. I'm not sure I can pull it off.)

Once I have my first line, I need rhymes for skin that fit with the monster in the trees. Thin, bin, win, fin, chagrin, twin, spin, original sin.

1A I shiver, cold damp air on bare skin
2B branches tremble in the wind, drop leaves
3A it crashes through the brush nearby, big, furred -- my breath goes thin
2B branches tremble in the wind, drop leaves
1A I shiver, cold damp air on bare skin

I'm reasonably satisfied with how this fits into everything else, and some punctuation will finalize everything.

Lover’s Chain

The moon rises, bright and full, and with it comes peace.

Bloody, bruised, you escape death;
Come, darling, rest, catch your breath.

You wore a dress I love, bell skirt swinging;
we danced beneath the bright moonlight.
Kiss me, you said, and I obeyed — left us breathless, joyful, clinging.

Behind us, woods, empty and dark.
Silent, but for the crunch of broken leaves.
“Wait,” I said, chilled and leery.
You kissed me, you smiled — I’ll be right back.

I shiver, cold damp air on bare skin,
branches tremble in the wind, drop leaves.
It crashes through the brush nearby, big, furred -- my breath goes thin.
Branches tremble in the wind, drop leaves.
I shiver, cold damp air on bare skin.

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